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Pokemon adventure part one
« on: October 01, 2014, 11:03:17 am »
FILE 1...
>>>RED
>>>GOLD
>>>RUBY
...
FILE 2 GOLD CHOSEN.
-Wow its my first day in Johto!
Well, ill continue my journey very soon.


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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #1 on: October 01, 2014, 11:26:29 am »
Well that was derpy


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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #2 on: October 01, 2014, 02:50:56 pm »
I'm in school. It's just like hell as usual... But I never thought that day would be so special. It was the afternoon. I was playing pool with donphan, polibo, and my other pokemon friends (20 of em). I thought I saw soneone out side my house. I ran out said and screamed "who the hell are you!?". I heard a kid sobbing in the distance. I said oh man I'm sorry... What's wrong. He said "that pidgey stole a special case that I needed to deliver to someone. I ran up with aibo. Aibo jumped after that pidgey, but then was flinged out of the way. Just as the pidgy was about to flee, aibo used swift as fast as possible and using its 3rd hand, it flinged off the branch while grabbing the case! The kid said thank you. And said if I wanted to come with him. I said where?
-to prof. Oak
-prof. Oak? That old guy -.-
-hey don't insult the professor!
-humph...
The next morning I left with the boy. While I was gone someone stole a totodile from prof. Elm. I received a call from Mum about this news. I ran to newbark town with Joey (the kids name). I saw the bandit. I quickly grabbed a pokeball and threw a pokemon out. It was a cyndaquil. I told it to use flamethrower! But the boy dodged it. Then he ran away. Just at that moment prof. Elm came up to me and said "so your the theif! I'm ironing you in!". I said I didn't do it. Then he understood. There where two Pokemon gone and I took one of them. Joey said come on Gold, so we left. I stood with my cyndaquil. I named it Exbo. I thought it was a good name for a Pokemon. And so we left to see a journey another day. To be continued... See ya till part 2!
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #3 on: October 01, 2014, 05:53:36 pm »
I'm in school. It's just like hell as usual... But I never thought that day would be so special. It was the afternoon. I was playing pool with donphan, polibo, and my other pokemon friends (20 of em). I thought I saw soneone out side my house. I ran out said and screamed "who the hell are you!?". I heard a kid sobbing in the distance. I said oh man I'm sorry... What's wrong. He said "that pidgey stole a special case that I needed to deliver to someone. I ran up with aibo. Aibo jumped after that pidgey, but then was flinged out of the way. Just as the pidgy was about to flee, aibo used swift as fast as possible and using its 3rd hand, it flinged off the branch while grabbing the case! The kid said thank you. And said if I wanted to come with him. I said where?
-to prof. Oak
-prof. Oak? That old guy -.-
-hey don't insult the professor!
-humph...
The next morning I left with the boy. While I was gone someone stole a totodile from prof. Elm. I received a call from Mum about this news. I ran to newbark town with Joey (the kids name). I saw the bandit. I quickly grabbed a pokeball and threw a pokemon out. It was a cyndaquil. I told it to use flamethrower! But the boy dodged it. Then he ran away. Just at that moment prof. Elm came up to me and said "so your the theif! I'm ironing you in!". I said I didn't do it. Then he understood. There where two Pokemon gone and I took one of them. Joey said come on Gold, so we left. I stood with my cyndaquil. I named it Exbo. I thought it was a good name for a Pokemon. And so we left to see a journey another day. To be continued... See ya till part 2!

That was terrible.

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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #4 on: October 01, 2014, 06:23:41 pm »
Like your better 😜.
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #5 on: October 01, 2014, 06:23:58 pm »
Lol just kidding.
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #6 on: October 01, 2014, 06:24:38 pm »
But you have to give people chances sometimes, not just insult them. (Joey told me that...)
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #7 on: October 01, 2014, 06:50:37 pm »
I straight up gave you my opinion on your 'story'

Wrong spellings throughout, wrong and missing punctuation, and formatted terribly.

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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #8 on: October 01, 2014, 06:52:44 pm »
I'm sorry the auto correct on the iPhone 6 is horrible!
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #9 on: October 01, 2014, 06:57:21 pm »
See it autocorrected terrible into horrible. Wow. 
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #10 on: October 01, 2014, 06:57:40 pm »
And it autocorrected again...
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #11 on: October 01, 2014, 09:50:00 pm »
And it autocorrected again...

See it autocorrected terrible into horrible. Wow.
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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #12 on: October 02, 2014, 06:25:51 am »
Idea. Write this story on the computer? Preferably on a word document then transfering it to the forums. That would be so much easier than using a smart phone. Trust me... I've tried it.
He's right. I tried doing that for my first story, but that was a nightmare. Computer is way better.

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Re: Pokemon adventure part one
« Reply #13 on: October 02, 2014, 07:14:42 am »
My computer is super laggy, so that's why I use the iPhone 6. Please don't mind my mistakes 😃. Ok bye!
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